My editor is one of the funniest guys alive. Whenever I get edits back from him, I break out in fits of laughter at some of his comments. He’s given me permission to share some of those with my readers.
From the edits of “Edge of Passion”
“Cute,” Leila managed to say, wondering what else Jane had been prattling on about while she’d had her heads in the clouds again. [If Leila has multiple heads, I think it’s worthy of an earlier mention!]
His breathing, his footsteps, none of it could be disguised by his cloak. It was one of the reasons, he and all his fellow Cloak Warriors wore specially designed soft-soled shoes when on assignment. [I’m wearing a pair right now; we non-cloak warriors call them sneakers]